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Chapter 1

"Ve, [Name]! I was just talking with Russia, and he told me this creepy story about a house just a little bit from here!" Italy yelled at you from across the table after the World Meeting ended once more, with nothing accomplished. "Wanna come with us? I got Germany and Japan to join too!"

Your eyes glittered with a manical excitement, and you stood up, yelling back, "Definitely!"

The other nations perked up at your loud conversation, and others joined in chorus, some louder than the others.

"Well, if Japan's going, I have to take care of him! He's my little brother, aru!" came China's response from the end of the table. Russia nodded to himself silently, already planning on going.

"Hey, British wank, are you coming with us?" France asked the sleeping England, poking his fuzzy head with a fountain pen. The Britishman woke up almost immediately, and snorted, "Of course I am, limey. If it's haunted, I can actually talk to the creatures." America started laughing,
"England can talk to his imaginary friends again!"

From there on, all chaos erupted as you and the Axis Powers snuck out the door, closing it with a small click no one could possibly hear among all the ruckus.

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After three hours of walking, lots of complaining from you and Italy about sore legs and tired backs, and lots of scolding and weird looks from Germany and Japan, you'd reached the manor the rumor spoke about.

"Ve... It's really here!" Italy's shaky voice said, unsure. You glanced over to see him frightened, jittery as if he just had a spoonful of pure
caffeine. You patted his back, and sighed, "It's alright. Probably just an old house; I'm pretty sure it's a hoax or something, right?" He gulped and nodded slightly, not as scared as he was before.

"I thought it was just a rumor," Japan murmured quietly, gazing at the house in awe. "I never thought we would actually find it."

"Eh, Bruder called me and wanted to tag along," Germany piped up. "Just as a warning, ja."

Speak of the devil, you thought to yourself, rolling your eyes as the albino thundered up the pathway.

"Hey peeps, what's going on?" Prussia cackled as he straightened out the blue uniform he was wearing. "Hey, this place has a really desolate feel, West. Not bad! And even [Name]'s here. That must mean something." He wiggled his eyebrows at you, trying to seduce you, but you stuck out your tongue, blushing and looking away.

"Guys, guys. It's a house," you blurted, making your way to the front door. "I'm going to go in and explore, and whoever's brave enough can follow me!" You pushed the door open, and Italy started crying, "Vee, [Name]! Please don't leave me!" You heard footsteps behind you, and held the door open to the teary-eyed Italy. "Any other takers?"

"I don't think it's very interesting," Germany scoffed, crossing his arms and glaring at you, waiting for the others to put in their thoughts.

"A-ano, [Name]... Germany-san's right, can't we just look at it from the outside and then go back?" Japan wondered aloud to you, a slightly panicked expression clouding his face. You glared daggers at the trio standing as still as statues outside, and grumbled, "Fine, Italy and I will go explore. Don't worry about US if we don't come back out by sunset!"

"Yeah, Doitsu, Nihon," Italy whined. "And Prussia-sama, after all the trouble we went through to get here? We'll just be here for a little while, please?" The three outside exchanged skeptical glances, then nodded to each other and headed for the door. Prussia snickered, "Italy's calling me Prussia-sama, so I'm definitely goin' in." Germany stared at him, and Prussia looked away quickly, muttering, "West's being West again..."

~

As you entered the old, musty house, you noticed it was a lot cleaner than you'd expect it to be. A few papers were littered over the floor here and there, rotting, but otherwise all the busts and other decor were hanging upright and in the correct places. You breathed in, then breathed out slowly, sensing the life that had once been there.

"Ahh..." you sighed, stretching out your arms. "I wonder if there's anything valuable here?"

"Forget that. Can we just leave now?" Germany nagged, inspecting the floorboards and shuffling his feet nervously. Prussia laughed his signature laugh, and clapped his little brother on the back, the sound echoing across the room.

"Kesese! What's the matter, West? Are you scared?!" Prussia laughed again, and then strolled in as if he were the owner of the place. Germany growled something, but nobody noticed as they started looking around as well.

CRASH!

The noise had come from another room in the house, and everyone jumped, frightened.

"G-gah," you squeaked as you and Italy hugged each other tightly. "Ve, [Name]..."

"Now do you think we should leave?!" Germany hollered at the two of you, pointing at where the noise came from. Japan quickly walked up to the angry German, and put a soothing hand on his shoulder. "Doitsu-kun, don't be silly. There are no such things as ghosts... Where's your common sense?" Germany loosened up, and said, "You're right, Japan. I'm sorry for yelling at you for that, [Name]." Japan, pleased with his peacemaking results, walked up the staircase leading to the source of the noise. "It's probably someone like America wreaking havoc up
there, and I can deal with someone like him..."

Even Prussia looked a little spooked as Japan disappeared from view. He seemed to reach out, and shouted, "Be careful, Japan! You better get your ass back down here before we have to go up and look for you!" Japan's muffled reply came, "I know, I'm just going to go see what's going on. Don't worry about me; after all, I've dealt with [Name] before, right?"

Although Japan's joke was pretty funny, nobody was able to even force a laugh. You shivered again, holding back the panic coming up your throat. You clutched onto Italy, and buried your face into his shirt as you waited for Japan to come back with some results. Prussia sat against the wall, biting his lip as Germany stood straight, determination plastered to his face.

It no longer seemed like a short exploration into an old mansion anymore. It wasn't a game anymore. It was going to be absolute war, and you knew it.

Your heart pounded, beat and thrashed for everyone here.
~

End of Chapter 1

(To be Continued)
HetaOni [Hetalia x Reader] [Series One]

Well, it seems like I've finished chapter one! It was tough incorperating the reader into this, even though the script was already there for me to use. :iconorzplz:

I'm not sure if I want to make this a [Hetalia x Reader], [One Heta-character x Reader] or just old-fashioned Reader-Insert with the person just being there and helping out with the clues. Have your say in the comments below. I'll make chapters 1-3 intro chapters in general, then I might bring the [x Reader] part into play. It depends on the audience this time!

Please don't post rude comments if you don't like.
DON'T LIKE, DON'T READ.

Warning: There may be vulgar language, violence, death and gore in the upcoming chapters. Please don't read if you don't like that sort of stuff.

I do not own the HetaOni scripts or HetaOni itself. Credits go to whoever made them. Visit HetaoniScripts if you want to read the scripts alone.

I do not own Hetalia. Credits go to Himaruya Hidekaz.

Most of all, I don't own you. :)
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FearsInTheWater Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2015  New member
And the madness begins Haha HAHAHA AHA AHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA HAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA -chockes-
Germany and Japan: -face palms-
Italy: Please hold me ;-;
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Romacat Featured By Owner May 4, 2014
Ahh this is bringing back all the feels! I'm gonna get ready to ball my eyes out!
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0lexdelapp Featured By Owner Mar 19, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Wanna be a PASTA
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PnkCookie Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2014
MOAR plz?
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LaurenJr Featured By Owner Feb 4, 2014
Ooooooh shit I'm gonna die, definitely going to die...... Oh fuck it- come at me bro! I got my daggers and Imma fight and then die afterwards! 
... Well imma die anyway right?
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BunnyUtonium Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2014  Student General Artist
more?
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Vontage116 Featured By Owner Jan 28, 2014   General Artist
When the next one?
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Inugirl115 Featured By Owner Dec 24, 2013
so it begins
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warriorcatslover29 Featured By Owner Nov 1, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
stupid moment) *reads comments* OH THIS IS AO ONI? OH * ITALY LETS GET OUT OF HERE!
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MiraakTheDragonborn Featured By Owner May 26, 2013  Student General Artist
Me:No.No no no no.NO!ITALY LETS GO NOW!EVERYONE OUT!*grabs Italy and drags him to the door to find it locked*SHIT!Who locked the door!?

Italy:Have you been hanging around mia fratello?

Me:*nods,and kicks door*DANG IT!

Prussia:Kesesesesesese!If we get in trouble,zhe awesome me shall protect you all!

*Ao Oni appears*

Me:*having random moment*Oh hallo.*waves at the monster*I'm just passing by with my friends.They are right...here...*finds out they are gone*Oh well.I'll just go find them.See ya!*leaves a very confused monster*

THAT IS SO ME
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Moniker-Slash Featured By Owner Dec 27, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
That sounds like me too! I'm strange... *throws popcorn at random guy's head*
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MrsTomlinson214 Featured By Owner Apr 13, 2013  Student Writer
Ah, this is so awesome! It's gonna make me cry! :iconcutesmileplz:
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Hinatathebloom1 Featured By Owner Feb 9, 2013
Nooooo not the mansion anywhere but that place Q_Q
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CRITTER-PIXELS11 Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2013
Ahhh ;-;
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Hinatathebloom1 Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2013
yeah..
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IHateNumbers Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Italia!! I want Italia in this story!
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CRITTER-PIXELS11 Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2013
Hehehe soon!
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IHateNumbers Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
;D
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myheartwillbreak Featured By Owner Jan 19, 2013  Student Writer
:iconmoreplz:
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mariaushromiya Featured By Owner Jan 17, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
Has chapter 2 been put up yet?


Anyway this is so great I hope the reader ends up with Italy,

P.S I such an Italy fangirl.
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SecretlySpain Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2013   Writer
:iconfuckyeahamericaplz: I've been looking everywhere for this type of thing! THANK YOU. I can't wait to read the next chapter! :D
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Z3phyr0s Featured By Owner Jan 5, 2013  Hobbyist Interface Designer
woooww I love you this, but may ask you, with who the "reader" will end up with?
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IvanFan12 Featured By Owner Jan 5, 2013
Thank you thank you thank you!!!! :) I have been looking all over for one of these! Yay:)!
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Silvia-x-Gaara Featured By Owner Nov 23, 2012
fun so far^^
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CRITTER-PIXELS11 Featured By Owner Nov 23, 2012
aww haha thanks! :D
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Silvia-x-Gaara Featured By Owner Nov 23, 2012
welcome^^
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Crazywirdo872 Featured By Owner Sep 12, 2012  Student General Artist
Wow.... This is really well written!! :D I can't wait for the next chapter to come out!!!! :) Keep up the good work!!~
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CRITTER-PIXELS11 Featured By Owner Sep 16, 2012
Thanks! :)
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epicmudkiplover Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I love it! I don't think there should be a love interest. Just the reader being there helping out with the clues.
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CRITTER-PIXELS11 Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2012
:D Thanks! Did you put your vote into the poll?
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epicmudkiplover Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
poll? Oh I'm to late... :iconcryforeverplz:
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CRITTER-PIXELS11 Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2012
Hahahaha, I'm sorry! It's alright, I'll count yours in anyways! ;)
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hetalialuvr46 Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
when is the next chapter coming out i love this
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CRITTER-PIXELS11 Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2012
Bwehehehe! :D I'm almost done with the entire series, but since it seems so slow it's killing you guys, isn't it. ;) TORTURE TORTURE.

I haven't died, but after I feel like I'm almost finished, I'll release chapters slowly day by day, sounds okay? :)
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hetalialuvr46 Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
yes it is torture and that sounds excellent
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CRITTER-PIXELS11 Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2012
^^ Thank you!
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hetalialuvr46 Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
ur welcome
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ImperialGoldDragon Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2012  Hobbyist Artist
when are ya gonna post the next chapter? i love hetaoni but whenever i even see the word it makes me sad...i need it to have a happy ending!!!!
(ps, i think you should just add the reader, no love interests, it just makes things that much more complicated)
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The-Panda-Bread Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
ILikeit~! :D
And what I would like to see is hetaliaxreader but with a smaller harem like 1-4 because i once reads fic that kinda got out of control with all 40 males of the hetalia cast chasing after reader-tan
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CRITTER-PIXELS11 Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2012
omgomgomg. D: that is pretty out of control, especially when all the characters are chasing after you... i think i've read the one you were thinking of, where the reader got kidnapped...

it's a good idea, indeed! thanks for your input! :)
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shaddowwarrior Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2012
really good please write more =]
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CRITTER-PIXELS11 Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2012
Thank you! :)
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shaddowwarrior Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2012
your welcome
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Marcxangfenix Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
exelent saga
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CRITTER-PIXELS11 Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2012
Thanks! :)
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Actually, Italy knew of the house because he had overheard the cast of the original Ao Oni talking about it, but he messed up the directions and ended up at the HetaOni mansion.

Anyways, I say just make it a reader insert with no pairing. We already have enough crap going around with Steve and everything, we don't need a huge love polygon to slow us down (ship tease would be nice, though).

I can't wait for the next one!
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CRITTER-PIXELS11 Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2012
Oh, I see. :/ It seems like I've messed up a little, huh? :D Thanks for the blurb, do you have a source so I can try and copy the dialogue and make it as accurate as I can?

Since Russia's pretty mysterious in HetaOni (talking on the phone with unknown people, etc.) I might just keep it like that. Crossing two different stories together seems a little jumbled, because there's an Oni mansion then there's a HetaOni mansion, which seemingly pops up out of nowhere. :/

Shiptease would be rather nice, I agree. I'm now planning on dabbling in that sort of stuff, and including little bits and pieces of romantic stuff for each character but no fluffy, steamy scenes.

Thank you for your input! :D
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:icontheislandofisolation:
[link] It was mentioned in the Extra. I'm not sure if anyone wrote a transcript, so you might be on your own.

I suppose having Russia as the source of information won't really change the course of the story. It still hasn't been explained who was on the phone with him, and I'm assuming you're going to try to extend and write your own ending to HetaOni.

Good luck with the story, and I'm sure I'm going to follow this. (I might not become a Watcher, but I'm going to lurk.)
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CRITTER-PIXELS11 Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2012
Alright, thank you! :) That's alright, having a visual works as well.

Well, Russia's quite the character and he's pretty yandere. It's not like he's going to be a bad guy, so I can see my upcoming plot. It would make sort of sense if I did extend it, but if the last part comes out before I do tie things up, I suppose I'll either follow it or outright reject it.

Thanks again for the luck (I'm going to need it) and the source!
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808Rawr808 Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2012
Oh man this is really good~ X3 I say Hetalia x Reader
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